A Very Short Story

The comic on this page is one that my daughter wrote when she was a young girl. I've dissected the comic so that I could show the different panels and make comments on the parts.

A Short ComicMy purpose in showing this comic is to demonstrate how a child could come up with a story for a comic from day to day observations. In the case of this comic, the story reveals the nature of a crane fly and the nature of a cat as observed by a child watching an actual crane fly and an actual cat.

The Action - Panel by Panel

Like all comics or most, the story opens with a title. The title was written simply with no decoration.

Crispin the Cranefly title
We can guess that this story is about a crane fly with the name of Crispin.

Crispin the CraneflyThe first panel shows our hero, Crispin who has 8 legs, flying. We can tell he is flying from the action marks next to his wings. We can assume that his mood is good from the expression on his face. So that you can see his expression better, I have added a close-up of his face in the lower left side of the illustration.

Crispin the CraneflyThe second panel shows our hero flying into a wall. We can imagine that it hurt Crispin because he said, "OW!" and a star is drawn above his head. Crispin's blacked-out eyes and open mouth also depicts his displeasure.

Crispin the CraneflyDespite Crispin being an unusual 8-legged crane fly, he shows an affinity with normal 6-legged crane flies as he backs up from the wall in order to fly toward it again. We see his determination in his narrowed eyes.

Crispin the CraneflyHe flies into the wall again and this time he says, "Ouch!."

Notice the jagged lines of the speech bubble. In this panel, the jagged speech bubble indicates screaming. The jagged speech bubble can also indicate shouting.

Crispin the CraneflyWith even more determination than before, Crispin backs up for another go at the wall. We can see in his eyes that his determination to fly forward, presumably straight through the wall, has grown. He is focused on the wall and nothing but the wall.

Crispin the CraneflyBefore Crispin has a chance to run into the wall again, an unnoticed predator snatches him from the air. It's a new hero, the adorable and perpetual hunter cat. We can safely guess that Crispin is captured by his scream, "Ahhhhhh!!" and the hunter cat's joyous, "Mwahaha!"

Crispin the CraneflyA sad ending for Crispin.

Crispin the CraneflyThe End - for Crispin anyway ...


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